colours

[aido179]

;D heres my newest song lyrics.

at the moment, I dont have a recording of it, as im not polished enough, but the lyrics, im fairly happy with. please crit and comment as appropriate.

colours:

I wish I could paint
what I see in you,
but the feelings
that are flowing through
my veins
dont match up at all

and I know time
is running out
but my hopes and dreams
is that it will work out
the same
my fate is sound

chorus:
i wish I could say
now I know im yours
but its ok,
its just colours

while its twisted its tangled
and its poorly written
and the teeth of time
have not yet bitten
ill be ok
hope you'll be the same

yes its cryptic, its coded
and its poorly written
but to pick up the nerves,
and the will to fight
and carry on...
no, it wont be long

::chorus::

the colours are blurred
im not seeing straight
but my time has come
my opportunity awaits
so why do I wait?

my fingers are blue
my palms are white
so ill close my eyes
and it'll be alright
alright

::chorus::

i could be breathing on the glass
and seeing shapes
i need to take a step back
and try to shake
the canvas clean
shake it all away



thanks guys

(PS posting is tough, but dont worry, ill be back full time come july!)

[Blastgirl]

I love it.

[Phil]

I hope you're going to do a blog if this song.

[aido179]

blast girl, phil, thank you loads!
i plan on doing not only a blog, but a full recording of it on saturday when I practice with my band. we are testing out our full setup with a mixer etc, and im hooking it up to my laptop to record some.

[Blastgirl]

That's fantastic Aido179.

[Mahnarch]

To be honest...

I can't 'hear' a song in my head by reading it.
I need at least an acopela version of you singing it.

Please provide?

[aido179]

ask you shall recieve!
www.youtube.com/watch?v=CkZBx0y1uUo

[Mahnarch]

Holy....Crap.....

You sound just like my buddy Jon Van Oss - and I bow to his feet on a regular basis.


"I'M NOT WORTHY!! I'M NOT WORTHY!!"

Great jeorb, Homestray!



Now I have to dig up some of Jonnie's old stuff and figure out how to post it.

[Blastgirl]

Wow Aido, you are really a true talent. I'm moved by this song and I would not butter you up I really mean it. It's beautiful and you perform it well.

[Phil]

I loved it. I added it to my favorites on YouTube.

Not being a musician I woudlnt' know but it seems like it would take quite a good singer to perform the song too because the pitch and the notes change a number of times during the song. Therefore it has to be sung by someone who can vary his notes. 'Voicerange' if I'm not mistaken is the term?

[Classicblast]

Yes I hate to seem like I'm just repeating everybody else but it's a good tune and very catchy and very substantial.

[aido179]

thanks a lot guys!
i was playing that recording yesterday when we were practising with the band, and they liked it too. I might be on to something! lol

[Kimm]

Very nice aido.